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Don’t confuse the gifted and the wasted
They need their own freedom to be tasted
Cuz it can fit into difficult cults of misinterpretation
And be banned without no salvation.

Let us expect the best of this situation,
Cuz the other way we might lose a lot of concentration
And blame it on the nation that taught us about migration
Ain’t it the worst problems that you’ve faced yet?

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2012-06-01 00:39

Ignas Skrodenis

Gaila, vertint negaliu.

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2012-05-29 22:43

Hadaly

I don't know... I think it is weak, although it reminds me of my first poems. The second line reads as nonsence to me. In the fourth line you don't need two negations "without" and "no", so you should leave out the "no" and, personally, I would advise not to use such shortenings as "cuz".
By the way, it is hard to grasp the message of this poem. Maybe you shouldn't try so hard to make every last word rhyme like that (I used to do it too, though I am not a great poet myself...).

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