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You are probably right
When you say I’m undone
Though you’ll not change my mind
I am joining the sun.

Your compassion is needless –
I will not feel the pain.
I will never falter
Through this act I’ll gain fame.

Fame everlasting –
I’m the first among men,
To conquer the heavens
The seas and the lands.

I am greater than death,
Immortality’s mine
While my name is remembered
I can never die.

You are probably right
When you say I’m undone
Though I’ll never surrender
My love for the sun.

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2022-04-02 16:32

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2009-12-17 18:20

Vincentas Starikovas

Oooh. First good one, once in a while. Good rhythm, nice rhyme, though some should be replaced just for the sake of meaning ("Joining the sun" is not equal to "My love for the sun" and such..). Relatively, I'd give you 4,1. Lacks more subtle meaning.

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2009-12-15 12:49

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Graziai surimuota.
Well done :)

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