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The melody of your touch
still sounds on my skin –
it‘s the reflection
of what‘s perfect
in here –

sunrise
and your breath
on the pillow.

The garden of freedom
in my lungs
makes me infinite –

from now
until I forget
how to love you
<>
how to love me –

I‘d find it again
under water,
without any hidden symbols
we speak clearly
in our dreams

you wake up –
I stay
and it‘s sad
you don‘t hear
how I‘m sharing my night stories
with strangers
under the blankets.

Hold my hand
under the water
let it go
not to sink –

say something
sharply
– I‘d survive it –

Your pulse
after the storm
beats like a million drums. –

Strange rumors from the neighbors:
they heard me last night
(thought/though I wasn‘t there).
2017-09-16 01:02
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Blogas komentaras Rodyti?
2017-09-16 17:54
tictac_it
I did not understand anything :) 1
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2017-09-16 15:49
chuligator
back to Lithuanian - sugrįžk į gimtąją palaukę, kur aidas lietuviškai atsišaukia :)
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2017-09-16 13:00
Mephisto
I'm sorry, but to put it straight, the knowledge of the language is miserable. The kind of abstract, and, frankly, blunt plays as such as "sounds on my skin" simply does not work on any anglosaxon/germanic languages. In general, the text is very, hmm, confused (: "makes me infinite" and similar nonsense does not help it either. Mistakes, such as "me" (instead of myself) "the" (instead of a more specific these/those/mine), etc. do not save it. In general, I would recommend translating it back to Lithuanian and seeing how it works out. On the bright side - it does seem genuine, and keep it up, you sure know how to write, all you have to do is to apply it to other languages (: Take care.
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