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the caterpillar
has to die
reincarnate
in to butterfly

and dance
across the blooming fields
and burn in flame
that has no shields

just golden flash
instant broil
its ashes'll
turn into the soil

and glorious
awaits return
as earthly worm
revives as lily's bloom

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2011-10-30 13:49

Lietaus žmogus

Thanx Man, would you please name me those important points? It's always helpful to have opinion of others, from outside of my mind

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2011-10-30 12:26

Intriganto

This reincarnation is a bit primitive, I'd say. No offense. Is it the expression of it? Not sure. I think your poem is missing some very important points which are only in your mind. However I like your metaphors and imagery.
Good luck.

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2010-06-09 23:57

Not so bad..keep it up!

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