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City walls in those small boroughs,
Passages for people, abbey towers,
Small gardens all around them
With tons of flowers to stare at.
City lights apologising for the day,
Blurry silhouettes of cats on the wall,
Our insanity flowing in the rainy rivers,
Asphalted roads reflecting ours looks.
Rain dogs - city guards,
Closed shops - city's dawn,
Dropped cigarettes - city memories,
Passengers of day - city's monuments.
Cars are passing, I catch the moment:
(Step away from the balcony, you'll fall)
A flash has caught the city, but
I can only see you in it.
2007-10-10 21:34
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Šią informaciją mato tik svetainės rėmėjai. Plačiau...
 
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2007-10-12 16:58
Stiklinė Maya
Hmm... The thought is not developed very well. I should say, that a second verse would clarify the matters. Nevertheless, the last line leaves the reader wondering: who is that mysterious "you"? Is it the narrator's love? Or is it something more complicated? In this case, I should like to see a second verse. Thank You.
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2007-10-12 13:12
Elfegas Sinušas
This one is not bad. But only nouns and verbs with a limited number of adjectives and pronouns. Keep going.
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