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october sky in windy days
release the memories
retrieve the face
the one so dear
the one so old
october sky
bring back my gold

october sky in windy days
so high
so endless space
work out the puzzle of myself
the one I need
it's not the one I‘ve held

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2022-04-02 16:52

Passchendaele

Job.

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2009-10-24 16:53

Vincentas Starikovas

Punctuation would be welcome here. It's very heart-breaking, when the poetic vision (aka. text) is quite good, but there no external system of rhythm. Damn those modernists and their lack of language knowladge.

P.S. I love these two lines:
"october sky
bring back my gold".

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2009-10-06 22:59

ana f

I do like simple forms becouse of meditation intention.

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2009-10-06 20:35

Intriganto

To be honest it's cool. I love autumn images.

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