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Forest Frost
The man I once was.
Lonely like a ghost, like a staircase bum.
Forest Frost
From the town of dead soldiers,
With deep underground car parks and pubs.
Forest Frost
Handsome man I once was.
Curly hair and a straight back,
Never kissed...... never loved…. never stabbed.
Had a good sense of humour….. had passion…. had lust
Forest Frost
Had some personal links with Proust and Degas
Forest Frost
Once in a while he’d engage with his loneliness
When on field trips to Far East, Australian wilderness.

Forest Frost from the town of dead soldiers.
Curly hair…. never dyed….. the straight back…. never scratched.
Was he dear? Was he the dearest to someone....... at last?

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2016-03-11 12:58

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Froast.
Užsukite po manuoju Deep eyes.

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2015-03-05 18:09

wrawr

I've had that idea, and seemingly was right, it does honestly cause confusion though, You might want to reformulate the entire sentence into something in the lines of "Did someone think of him as a darling, at last?" Assuming the lithuanian word of at last would be "galiausiai, pagaliau", as it's not "at least".

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2015-03-05 18:03

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"Was he dear?" the "dear" in this case is a noun. Another noun to replace it could be "darling". Probably it would be better to take the definite article from the last question as it does cause confusion. If I change "dear" in both questions to "darling": "Was he darling? Was he darling to someone...at last? Would this do any better?
An overall idea of the two questions is to express a silent hope of being loved by someone in the past, at least secretly,even though the life has passed without being able to experience true love which can be tender and yet be harsh.

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2015-03-05 16:18

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The idea is fine and the presentation is fine as well. Would you mind explaining the "Was he dear? Was he the dearest to someone....... at last?" part? As it's not the perfect formulation once again.

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